RegisterRegister
Log in to check your private messagesLog in to check your private messages
Log inLog in
FAQ  -  SEARCH  -  MEMBERS  -  FAVORITES  -  PROFILE
Beautiful poem by someone in my creative writing club
Goto page 1, 2  Next
 
This forum is locked: you cannot post, reply to, or edit topics.   This topic is locked: you cannot edit posts or make replies.   printer-friendly view    Tape Op Message Board Forum Index -> 5/03-2/05: Off-Topic / Off-Color / Off-the-Cuff
View previous topic :: View next topic  
Author Message
wing
on a wing and a prayer


Joined: 02 May 2003
Posts: 5347
Location: brooklyn, ny

PostPosted: Sun Feb 06, 2005 2:55 pm    Post subject: Beautiful poem by someone in my creative writing club Reply with quote

I'm in a Creative Writing club at my school, and unfortunately am stuck on the email list for everyone to email their poems and stories. For some odd reason I torture myself by reading most of them. Check out this classic:

Angry words fill my head, too much it can't be said.
Sorrow fills my heart, too much don't know where to start.
I want to scream, instead I cry and can't stop, don't know why.
I feel tired, yet can't sleep, if only time could stop...keep.
Things I want to say, but I am left astray.
Keeping strength and hope, yet not for long, not, nope.
Comfort I desire, yet it's put out like water to fire.
Warth would be ideal, but remains confermed closed like a stampled seal.
Waiting for the darkness to turn to light so it can be happy and bright, not to leave my site.


Deep.
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message Visit poster's website
Ivon
steve albini likes it


Joined: 28 Apr 2004
Posts: 366

PostPosted: Sun Feb 06, 2005 3:00 pm    Post subject: Re: Beautiful poem by someone in my creative writing club Reply with quote

wing wrote:
I'm in a Creative Writing club at my school, and unfortunately am stuck on the email list for everyone to email their poems and stories. For some odd reason I torture myself by reading most of them. Check out this classic:

Angry words fill my head, too much it can't be said.
Sorrow fills my heart, too much don't know where to start.
I want to scream, instead I cry and can't stop, don't know why.
I feel tired, yet can't sleep, if only time could stop...keep.
Things I want to say, but I am left astray.
Keeping strength and hope, yet not for long, not, nope.
Comfort I desire, yet it's put out like water to fire.
Warth would be ideal, but remains confermed closed like a stampled seal.
Waiting for the darkness to turn to light so it can be happy and bright, not to leave my site.


Deep.


Wow. That's profound. It rhymes, as well. I wish I could write like that. Someday, someday.
_________________
www.myspace.com/nanovukojaniik

www.hurleywaldrip.com
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message Send e-mail
Mr PC
buyin' gear


Joined: 12 Oct 2003
Posts: 599
Location: Cincinnati

PostPosted: Sun Feb 06, 2005 3:01 pm    Post subject: Re: Beautiful poem by someone in my creative writing club Reply with quote

Damn. I'd sure like to party with that person!
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message AIM Address
Bear
deaf.


Joined: 24 Jul 2003
Posts: 1880
Location: Jacksonville, FL

PostPosted: Sun Feb 06, 2005 4:14 pm    Post subject: Re: Beautiful poem by someone in my creative writing club Reply with quote

"... keep."
_________________
I am wangtacular.
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message Send e-mail Visit poster's website
wing
on a wing and a prayer


Joined: 02 May 2003
Posts: 5347
Location: brooklyn, ny

PostPosted: Sun Feb 06, 2005 4:34 pm    Post subject: Re: Beautiful poem by someone in my creative writing club Reply with quote

Don't ask me what "warth" and a "stampled seal" are.
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message Visit poster's website
Bear
deaf.


Joined: 24 Jul 2003
Posts: 1880
Location: Jacksonville, FL

PostPosted: Sun Feb 06, 2005 5:31 pm    Post subject: Re: Beautiful poem by someone in my creative writing club Reply with quote

They're probably really deep words that relate to inner-children screaming, and the impaling of one's heart upon the cruel stakes formed out of rejection from one's lover.
_________________
I am wangtacular.
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message Send e-mail Visit poster's website
Rigsby
mixes from purgatory


Joined: 23 Mar 2004
Posts: 2908
Location: London, England

PostPosted: Sun Feb 06, 2005 7:14 pm    Post subject: Re: Beautiful poem by someone in my creative writing club Reply with quote

Thanks for tormenting us too. Wink
_________________
The large print giveth, and the small print taketh away.

rigsbysmith.com
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message Visit poster's website
the velour fog
buyin' a studio


Joined: 07 May 2003
Posts: 874

PostPosted: Mon Feb 07, 2005 2:37 am    Post subject: Re: Beautiful poem by someone in my creative writing club Reply with quote

wow. that was terrible. the sad thing is that's on par with most creative writing clubs i've seen..
_________________
"Set Phasers to Extra Slow."
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message
andrew embassy
george martin


Joined: 01 Sep 2003
Posts: 1396
Location: Seattle, WA

PostPosted: Mon Feb 07, 2005 2:45 am    Post subject: Re: Beautiful poem by someone in my creative writing club Reply with quote

Bear wrote:
"... keep."


I'm laughing my ass off, brilliant!
_________________
HEY! Who forgot they bag?
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message Visit poster's website AIM Address Yahoo Messenger
SpockPicasso
gettin' sounds


Joined: 15 May 2003
Posts: 138

PostPosted: Mon Feb 07, 2005 6:19 pm    Post subject: Re: Beautiful poem by someone in my creative writing club Reply with quote

Whoo. That's, um, something else.

When I was in high school I was <dorkalert> co-editor of the literary magazine </dorkalert> and we got dozens of submissions that were on par with this one. I really really wanted to put out a "bootleg" version of the lit mag, consisting of only this type of stuff, but the idea was shot down as being too cruel.
_________________
Down in the basement we hear the sound of machines...
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message
psychicoctopus
buyin' a studio


Joined: 14 May 2003
Posts: 890
Location: Austin, TX

PostPosted: Mon Feb 07, 2005 10:18 pm    Post subject: Re: Beautiful poem by someone in my creative writing club Reply with quote

Please, PLEASE keep all Ovation acoustic guitars away from this person.
_________________
Armed with seven rounds of space doo-doo pistols
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message
marqueemoon
carpal tunnel


Joined: 08 May 2003
Posts: 1593
Location: Seattle, WA

PostPosted: Mon Feb 07, 2005 10:21 pm    Post subject: Re: Beautiful poem by someone in my creative writing club Reply with quote

psychicoctopus wrote:
Please, PLEASE keep all Ovation acoustic guitars away from this person.


*spits on monitor*
_________________
I the prostitute, shall not hide...
But I was very much bothered with my work!
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message Send e-mail Visit poster's website
Ivon
steve albini likes it


Joined: 28 Apr 2004
Posts: 366

PostPosted: Tue Feb 08, 2005 1:09 am    Post subject: Re: Beautiful poem by someone in my creative writing club Reply with quote

psychicoctopus wrote:
Please, PLEASE keep all Ovation acoustic guitars away from this person.


I used to own one of those a time ago, and man, are they ever shite for sound.

"I wish I could tell you how I feel, but how do I know these feelings are real?
I glance at my crotch--*crosses out with pencil*--watch and up toward the sky and the thought of our love just makes me cry".

Hmm...that's pretty good.
_________________
www.myspace.com/nanovukojaniik

www.hurleywaldrip.com
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message Send e-mail
MichaelAlan
tinnitus


Joined: 07 Oct 2004
Posts: 1144
Location: Passing under Sleep's dark and silent gate

PostPosted: Tue Feb 08, 2005 11:22 am    Post subject: Re: Beautiful poem by someone in my creative writing club Reply with quote

When I was in 3rd grade I had to do a poem for a school assignment, and I just copied a Shel Silverstien Poem word for word from "A Light in the Attic". I got an A.




Mike
_________________
All energy flows according to the whims of the great magnet...
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message Visit poster's website
JGriffin
zen recordist


Joined: 31 Jul 2003
Posts: 6739
Location: criticizing globally, offending locally

PostPosted: Mon Feb 14, 2005 7:42 pm    Post subject: Re: Beautiful poem by someone in my creative writing club Reply with quote

psychicoctopus wrote:
Please, PLEASE keep all Ovation acoustic guitars away from this person.


And everyone else for that matter. Ovations blow.
_________________
"Jeweller, you've failed. Jeweller."

"Lots of people are nostalgic for analog. I suspect they're people who never had to work with it." Brian Eno

All the DWLB music is at http://dwlb.bandcamp.com/
Back to top
View user's profile Send private message Visit poster's website
Display posts from previous:   
This forum is locked: you cannot post, reply to, or edit topics.   This topic is locked: you cannot edit posts or make replies.   printer-friendly view    Tape Op Message Board Forum Index -> 5/03-2/05: Off-Topic / Off-Color / Off-the-Cuff All times are GMT - 4 Hours
Goto page 1, 2  Next
Page 1 of 2

 
Jump to:  
You cannot post new topics in this forum
You cannot reply to topics in this forum
You cannot edit your posts in this forum
You cannot delete your posts in this forum
You cannot vote in polls in this forum