Hey guys here is a new Song I wrote.
The recording quality is not nearly as good as what you guys are doing.
I am using a Makie Satellite. and a pair of 25.00 headphones
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/default ... ID=6418481
The song is called " Light "
it is a Bahai' Song.
Peace
Shane
Original Song - Please Listen !
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Though admirably sincere, your lyrics are a bit on the rough side. I would say try not to force syllables into beats they don't agree with, and work to find rhymes that aren't the first thing that pops into your head (night/light, love/above, voice/choice, etc.)
I don't think this song was made for me, so I'll leave it at the technique level. You seem to enjoy doing what you're doing, though, and that's a gift in itself, so don't let anything I've said get you down.
I don't think this song was made for me, so I'll leave it at the technique level. You seem to enjoy doing what you're doing, though, and that's a gift in itself, so don't let anything I've said get you down.
Great evaluation.brainfreezebob wrote:Though admirably sincere, your lyrics are a bit on the rough side. I would say try not to force syllables into beats they don't agree with, and work to find rhymes that aren't the first thing that pops into your head (night/light, love/above, voice/choice, etc.)
I don't think this song was made for me, so I'll leave it at the technique level. You seem to enjoy doing what you're doing, though, and that's a gift in itself, so don't let anything I've said get you down.
I Originally wrote this song with just an acoustic guitar, and kinda played it free of structure. Depending on how I felt like playing it. So when I put it down with a 4/4 Drum beat, I must say it was difficult to get all the word in each measure. I was hoping no one would notice
Thanks for the input.
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Shane
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