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new WIP, looking for advice.

Post by pixeltarian » Sun Jul 07, 2013 1:17 am

https://soundcloud.com/jefffreyjamesmusic/footstepping

It's just the first verse, but I've been mixing it all day, and wanted to see if anyone can tell me what they think. I can't tell what I think. My mixes used to be pretty muddy, but now I think I may have swung too far in the other direct.

any and all pointers/advice/opionions/etc. greatly appreciated!

kick - sampled
bass - sampled
piano - sampled
lead vocal -SM58 beta
Drone BGVs - Oktava MK012 with RTT M1 LDC.


07/07/2013 @ 3:47am:
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Post by Snarl 12/8 » Sun Jul 07, 2013 1:31 am

That's a weird freakin' tune, but I like it. I wish the sampled stuff didn't sound so sampled though. I don't feel like samples really fit this style (whatever the hell style it is), unless you want that juxtaposition between the really organic feeling vocals and the more artificial sounding other stuff. Also, I feel like the vox could be a little more buried in the music to good effect, but I'd have to hear it. Maybe just "bringing up" whatever you've got that's not lead vox or sampled would work. Is that just the bg vox?
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Post by pixeltarian » Sun Jul 07, 2013 1:48 am

Snarl 12/8 wrote:That's a weird freakin' tune, but I like it. I wish the sampled stuff didn't sound so sampled though. I don't feel like samples really fit this style (whatever the hell style it is), unless you want that juxtaposition between the really organic feeling vocals and the more artificial sounding other stuff. Also, I feel like the vox could be a little more buried in the music to good effect, but I'd have to hear it. Maybe just "bringing up" whatever you've got that's not lead vox or sampled would work. Is that just the bg vox?
Ohhh.. I'm glad you said all that. I usually bury the vocals too much, so I think I overdid trying to bring them out. Just turned em down a bit and it sounds better.

I do have a real piano I might use at some point. I have 3 roommates so organic stuff is hard to track lately (though it's what I prefer).

I'm also going to try adding a few organic things to do like rezo guitar. I kinda want to see if I can have a synth bass in a song like this. I feel people are trying to merge folk and electronic lately, but most are failing. So we'll see if I get counted among them or succeed.

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Post by agershon » Sun Jul 07, 2013 10:22 am

I dig this tune!

As for the production, I think I would try to thin out the pad/bass thing going on. It's a bit thick, I think. There's a neat spooky, ambient vibe going on here but I think some space would do this track good. This will also allow the other instruments to come through better.

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Post by Gregg Juke » Sun Jul 14, 2013 6:37 am

Hey JJ,

I like it too. I'm not feeling the electronic approach so much either, but I guess it would be good to listen to what you develop from here before deciding...

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