Beautiful poem by someone in my creative writing club

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Beautiful poem by someone in my creative writing club

Post by wing » Sun Feb 06, 2005 10:55 am

I'm in a Creative Writing club at my school, and unfortunately am stuck on the email list for everyone to email their poems and stories. For some odd reason I torture myself by reading most of them. Check out this classic:

Angry words fill my head, too much it can't be said.
Sorrow fills my heart, too much don't know where to start.
I want to scream, instead I cry and can't stop, don't know why.
I feel tired, yet can't sleep, if only time could stop...keep.
Things I want to say, but I am left astray.
Keeping strength and hope, yet not for long, not, nope.
Comfort I desire, yet it's put out like water to fire.
Warth would be ideal, but remains confermed closed like a stampled seal.
Waiting for the darkness to turn to light so it can be happy and bright, not to leave my site.


Deep.

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Post by Ivon » Sun Feb 06, 2005 11:00 am

wing wrote:I'm in a Creative Writing club at my school, and unfortunately am stuck on the email list for everyone to email their poems and stories. For some odd reason I torture myself by reading most of them. Check out this classic:

Angry words fill my head, too much it can't be said.
Sorrow fills my heart, too much don't know where to start.
I want to scream, instead I cry and can't stop, don't know why.
I feel tired, yet can't sleep, if only time could stop...keep.
Things I want to say, but I am left astray.
Keeping strength and hope, yet not for long, not, nope.
Comfort I desire, yet it's put out like water to fire.
Warth would be ideal, but remains confermed closed like a stampled seal.
Waiting for the darkness to turn to light so it can be happy and bright, not to leave my site.


Deep.
Wow. That's profound. It rhymes, as well. I wish I could write like that. Someday, someday.

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Re: Beautiful poem by someone in my creative writing club

Post by Mr PC » Sun Feb 06, 2005 11:01 am

Damn. I'd sure like to party with that person!

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Re: Beautiful poem by someone in my creative writing club

Post by Bear » Sun Feb 06, 2005 12:14 pm

"... keep."
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Re: Beautiful poem by someone in my creative writing club

Post by wing » Sun Feb 06, 2005 12:34 pm

Don't ask me what "warth" and a "stampled seal" are.

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Post by Bear » Sun Feb 06, 2005 1:31 pm

They're probably really deep words that relate to inner-children screaming, and the impaling of one's heart upon the cruel stakes formed out of rejection from one's lover.
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Post by Rigsby » Sun Feb 06, 2005 3:14 pm

Thanks for tormenting us too. :wink:
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Re: Beautiful poem by someone in my creative writing club

Post by the velour fog » Sun Feb 06, 2005 10:37 pm

wow. that was terrible. the sad thing is that's on par with most creative writing clubs i've seen..
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Post by andrew embassy » Sun Feb 06, 2005 10:45 pm

Bear wrote:"... keep."
I'm laughing my ass off, brilliant!
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Re: Beautiful poem by someone in my creative writing club

Post by SpockPicasso » Mon Feb 07, 2005 2:19 pm

Whoo. That's, um, something else.

When I was in high school I was <dorkalert> co-editor of the literary magazine </dorkalert> and we got dozens of submissions that were on par with this one. I really really wanted to put out a "bootleg" version of the lit mag, consisting of only this type of stuff, but the idea was shot down as being too cruel.
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Re: Beautiful poem by someone in my creative writing club

Post by psychicoctopus » Mon Feb 07, 2005 6:18 pm

Please, PLEASE keep all Ovation acoustic guitars away from this person.
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Post by marqueemoon » Mon Feb 07, 2005 6:21 pm

psychicoctopus wrote:Please, PLEASE keep all Ovation acoustic guitars away from this person.
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Post by Ivon » Mon Feb 07, 2005 9:09 pm

psychicoctopus wrote:Please, PLEASE keep all Ovation acoustic guitars away from this person.
I used to own one of those a time ago, and man, are they ever shite for sound.

"I wish I could tell you how I feel, but how do I know these feelings are real?
I glance at my crotch--*crosses out with pencil*--watch and up toward the sky and the thought of our love just makes me cry".

Hmm...that's pretty good.

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Re: Beautiful poem by someone in my creative writing club

Post by MichaelAlan » Tue Feb 08, 2005 7:22 am

When I was in 3rd grade I had to do a poem for a school assignment, and I just copied a Shel Silverstien Poem word for word from "A Light in the Attic". I got an A.




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Re: Beautiful poem by someone in my creative writing club

Post by JGriffin » Mon Feb 14, 2005 3:42 pm

psychicoctopus wrote:Please, PLEASE keep all Ovation acoustic guitars away from this person.
And everyone else for that matter. Ovations blow.
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